I can’t stop thinking about life. Why are we here? What happened’s after life? Is there a key to heaven or hell?
My life is balanced between happiness or sadness. It never stops bugging me. Sometimes I think I’m in a drama on TV but that’s just me. Life has its highs like the tree in my garden and its lows like the Atlantic ocean. Life is like a box of chocolates. You just don’t know what your gonna get.
October 7, 2014 at 12:34 pm
Hello Harry,
Your first paragraph starts well and immediately gives an indication of your character’s mood.
Target: your second paragraph is not as strong and would be greatly improved if you were to build in visual clues that indicate your character’s emotions. Write a plan to help develop this.